This is a first attempt at a light hearted script :) Still need to type the second half but here's part one anyway

A Paradise OF Persuasion

EXT. SPARINA HOTEL
This place is newly built, huge and set in a peaceful area. The impala pulls up in the driveway, Sam and Dean get out, slamming the doors behind them. They retreat to the boot to pick up their bags

DEAN
Man, that hellhound was one nasty son of a bitch…. Literally

SAM
Well, I’ve googled the place- no dogs

DEAN
Funny geek boy
(eyeing up hotel)
Think we’ll see some hot maids?

Sam huffs as he gives the classic Dean Winchester grin

DEAN
What?

SAM
It’s all about sex with you

DEAN
(offended)
That’s not true. I got my car, food-

SAM
(sarcastic)
Because they’re so important

Dean nods as Sam marches on ahead to the hotel

INT. SPARINA HOTEL - CHECK IN AREA
The boys approach the front desk. The person on duty has their back turned. Sam starts ringing the bell.

DUTY
(seductively)
Can I get you two hunks a room?

Sam shifts around uncomfortably catching sight of Dean’s told-you-so grin. The person turns around in the sticky chair - it’s a guy, with the nametag Mark. Dean jumps putting his hand to his chest.

DEAN
Jesus!

MARK
What?

DEAN
(nervous)
Uh… I just remembered I forgot my bible

SAM
(to Mark)
We’d like a room please, two singles

He taps into the computer

MARK
(muttering)
That’s a shame

DEAN
(alarmed)
What?!

MARK
I thought there were no vacancies, you’re in luck

Dean shoots Sam an awkward glance

INT. HOTEL - ROOM 22
The boys open the door in horror

BOTH
Pink?!

The walls are pink but the rest of the room is luxurious. Two very comfortable beds, a pool side view and plenty of storage space. Sam picks his bed, unpacking while Dean checks out the bathroom

DEAN (O.S)
Dude, steam shower!

SAM
(uninterested)
That’s great

DEAN (O.S)
Spa treatment? This place is awesome

SAM
Since when are you into that?

Dean returns to the bedroom

DEAN
I was only saying

He starts unpacking
Sam turns to see a plasma screen on the wall, his face drops.

SAM
Perfect

DEAN
Woah! Imagine the porn on that thing

Sam throws him an icy glare

DEAN
Oh loosen up Sammy - we’re supposed to relax

He looks out the window - a pool, women in bikinis

DEAN
I’ll catch you later

Sam
But you hate-

Dean has already left
INT.HOTEL- HALLWAY
Sam makes his way across to the drinks machine, he sees Mark. There are things being thrown in the next room. An angry woman storms out and nods at him.
Sam takes his drink, turning around to see Mark smiling at him.

SAM
Nice hotel you got here

MARK
Yeah, it’s fun meeting new people. Very… relaxing

Sam looks uncomfortable

EXT.POOL
Dean emerges from the hotel, sun beaming in his face, shades on and doing the typical ‘man’ walk. He’s distracted by all the women waving at him and jumps when Mark appears, giggling in front of him.

DEAN
Listen dude I don’t-

MARK
You’re so manly

DEAN
(agreeing)
Yeah, I am

MARK
You should embrace your feminine side a little more

Dean’s not amused

DEAN
Very funny

He walks away and Mark tries to pull him back but fails.

INT. HOTEL- ROOM 22
Dean is at the door starting to open it when he hears something. Carry on Wayward Son is playing at full blast with Sam singing along - badly.
He walks in, eyebrows raised at seeing his usually uptight brother sprawled out on the bed and stuffing his face with popcorn.

SAM
(mouth full)
What?

Dean shakes his head

DEAN
(to self)
This place is so freakin’ weird

SAM
This is my jam

He excitedly hadbangs to Black Betty.

INT. HOTEL - HALLWAY
Dean passes a young maid

DEAN
Hey there

She scoffs

MAID
Men are such pigs

She marches on leaving an offended Dean. He walks forward, stopping in his tracks, staring at something and tilting his head.

INT.HOTEL- ROOM 22
It’s late at night, Sam is asleep, almost falling off the small bed. Dean wanders in, unimpressed at the mess.

DEAN
This is disgusting, I’m offended

He walks into the bathroom, checking himself out in the full length mirror.
Sam falls off the bed and jumps up straight away

SAM
I’m ok!

DEAN (O.S)
Sam?

SAM
Yeah?

DEAN (O.S)
Can you come here a sec?

Sam slumps across, where Dean is now worriedly posing

DEAN
Do these jeans make my ass look big?

Sam’s lost for words. Dean turns, looking upset

DEAN
Just be honest, I can take it

SAM
No! I’m not gonna stare at your ass!

DEAN
I knew it, I’ll buy a new pair tomorrow

Sam is now leaning against the doorway

SAM
You should relax, you’re too tense

DEAN
That is just typical!

He storms out and starts re-folding his clothes

SAM
What did I do?

DEAN
Don’t even try the guilt trip on me because it won’t work

SAM
(not bothered)
Whatever, I’m going for a beer

DEAN
Fine, do that. But don’t come crying to me when you can’t feel your legs

Exit Sam.
Dean sees himself in the mirror

DEAN
My lips are so average

INT. BAR AREA
Sam is sat on a stool, drinking- dead to the world until a woman comes to order. Sam is very drunk.

SAM
Wow

WOMAN
What?

SAM
You’re really hot. How about we go up to my room and-
(Woman leaves)
Oh, bye then…. Witch

The Barman (Martin) starts talking to him

MARTIN
I used to do that. Drink and hit on innocent women

SAM
Why did you stop?

MARTIN
I just didn’t want to be the bad guy anymore.
What’s your name?

SAM
(thinks)
Uh…. Sam Winchester

MARTIN
Sam, you look like a good kid

SAM
Hmmm… I was this morning

MARTIN
(quieter)
You spoken to the receptionist by any chance?

SAM
Yeah about 3 hours ago, nice guy

Martin’s hiding something

SAM
What is it?

MARTIN
The guy didn’t even have to fill out any forms when he came. It’s like he can persuade you to do anything

SAM
I’ve been Abbra-Kaddabrad!!!!

MARTIN
(laughs)
No, you’re just drunk. Better go get a rest

INT.HOTEL-ROOM 22
Sam is watching tv.
Enter Dean, smiling

SAM
Where’ve you been
DEAN
I just had the best massage and now a long hot shower

SAM
Who are you and what have you done with my idiot brother?

DEAN
(defensive)
You’re one to talk Mr.Layabout
(to tv)
Turn that crap off!

He starts running the shower.
Sam is about to say something but decides to go to bed.

INT. HOTEL- BAR AREA
Martin is busy clearing up. Mark pops up from nowhere

MARTIN
Hi

MARK
What were you and Mr. Winchester talking about?

MARTIN
(dismissive)
Oh same old, girls and sport

MARK
(firm)
It’s fine, you can tell me

MARTIN
We were talking about you and how you seem to change people. You scare the crap out of me

He snaps out of it

MARK
That’s not very nice


*CONTINUED SOON* :car
PART 2

INT.HOTEL - ROOM 22 (MORNING)
Sam wakes up panting for breath, another nightmare.
He looks over in horror.
Dean is lying with a green face mask on, cucumber slices over his eyes.

SAM
What the-?

The alarm clock goes off and Dean gets up peacefully, taking off the cucumber and smiling at a new day

DEAN
(innocent)
What?

SAM
Is there something you wanna tell me?

Dean looks around

DEAN
Like what?

SAM
(laughing)
You’re wearing a face mask-

DEAN
So?

SAM
You nagged me about drinking

DEAN
It can be very bad!

SAM
Man, you won a drinking contest in Michigan

Sam gives the serious look

DEAN
(confused)
But all I drink is wine

SAM
(thinking)
Did you speak to that receptionist?

DEAN
(smiles)
Yeah, nice guy
SAM
(placates hands)
No, bad! Something’s going on. This girl wasn’t into me

DEAN
Maybe that’s because you’re a jerk

Sam smiles, then frowns

SAM
(remembering)
That barman…. What’s his name? Martin?

DEAN
(sarcastic)
Congratulations, you got drunk AND remembered a name

SAM
Shut up!

He flings a pillow at Dean, the corner hits his eye. Dean covers it and squirms in pain.

DEAN
Ow! That really hurt

SAM
Sorry

DEAN
You’re all the same! You never think!

He runs to the bathroom to wash his face. Dean brings his head up to see Sam behind him in the mirror.

SAM
When you’ve finished your hissy fit, I think we should talk to that guy

Dean scowls in offence, dabbing at his face with a pink towel

INT. HOTEL-BAR AREA
Martin happily chats to the guests.
Sam and Dean come through the doors.
Dean is blinking madly

SAM
(irritated)
Dude, stop it

DEAN
(annoyed)
Well if you hadn’t been such a thoughtless idiot-

Dean notices the way his brother is walking

DEAN
Stand up straight, you’re embarrassing us

SAM
And you’re not?

Dean stays quiet. They reach the bar.

MARTIN
What can I get you?

SAM
We spoke last night-

Martin can’t remember. Dean starts helping himself to the free cherrys

MARTIN
Who are you?

SAM
Sam Winchester

Martin shakes his head

MARTIN
Sorry I-

DEAN
(interrupting)
Oh you’ve gotta try these, beautiful

SAM
(to Martin)
Please ignore her- him, I mean him

Dean stares

SAM
You don’t remember?

Martin shakes his head again.
Sam is puzzled as they walk away, Dean is still staring

SAM
Will you stop giving me the look?!

INT. HOTEL LOBBY
On seeing Mark talking to guests in the distance, Sam pulls Dean back, clinging to the wall.

P.O.V SAM
Mark is talking to a woman, obviously under a lot of stress as she is crying. In a split second a huge grin appears on her face and she leaves the building as though nothing happened

Sam is curious

SAM
Hey

DEAN
What?

SAM
(annoyed)
You weren’t paying attention

Dean raises his eyebrows

DEAN
Don’t take that tone with me

Sam huffs and drags him along.
Mark smiles when they get to the lobby
MARK
(to Sam)
Problem with your room sir?

Sam is caught again

SAM
No, we were just heading to the pool

MARK
Have a nice swim

SAM
Oh we will

Exit Sam and Dean

EXT. HOTEL
Sam stops

SAM
What the hell am I doing???

DEAN
You’re walking, you know, left right

SAM
I know that! What happened back there?

DEAN
You spoke to the lovely man and said we’re going swimming which is pointless because we don’t have our things

SAM
But I don’t want to go

DEAN
Fine, we’ll go somewhere else

SAM
But I was going to ask him something

DEAN
(tired)
We can go back

Sam nods

INT. HOTEL LOBBY
Sam is almost there when he turns in the other direction

SAM
I knew it
(to Dean)
Persuasion. He told you to stay in touch with your feminine side, right?

DEAN
Best advice I’ve been given

Sam bites his lip

INT. HOTEL LOBBY (NIGHT)
Mark Is busy typing, he stops to check something almost falling off the chair when an angry Sam jumps out from behind.

SAM
I know what you can do

MARK
Book rooms?

SAM
(laughs)
No. You can persuade pople to do what you want. Hypnotise them? That’s why it’s all shiny happy people in here, why my brother’s acting like my wife?

Mark smiles

MARK
You know how many single depressed people walk through those doors?
A lot. I help them

SAM
How did you help Dean?

MARK
He’s a womanizer, I just wanted a little fun

SAM
Wait, why are you telling me this?

MARK
Exactly

He has the penetrating stare fixed on the youngest Winchester. Sam begins to tilt his head when Dean jumps up and repeatedly whacks Mark over the head with a handbag.

SAM
Good work

SAM
(to Mark)
You snap him out of it now

MARK
But you’ve always wanted a sister

Sam gives the ‘hell no’ expression. Dean tilts his head

MARK
(to Dean)
You are Dean Winchester, a womanizing pi-

SAM
No pig business

MARK
A womanizing, rather vein man

Dean comes back, no idea where he is and looking from Mark to Sam

SAM
Thanks

MARK
Wait, I told you to relax. How did you-?

SAM
Family secret

MARK
Oh

Dean licks his lips

DEAN
Is that cherry lipgloss?!

MARK
(to Sam)
You sure?

He shrugs his shoulders

SAM
I’d rather have a pain in the ass than all the nagging

Mark laughs

MARK
I’m not stopping

SAM
Yeah I figured. Just no ev-

MARK
Do I look evil?
(to Dean)
Enjoy the rest of your stay

Dean smiles awkwardly

EXT.HOTEL POOL (SLIDING SCREEN)
Dean is surrounded by women in the shallow end

DEAN
….and that’s when I climbed Everest

INT. HOTEL BAR
The boys are drinking and playing pool
INT. SPA
Dean walks past, the girl smiles and waves. He is confused

INT. HOTEL- ROOM 22
They are packing up, Sam is neat while Dean rolls his clothes into balls. He comes cross a tight pair of jeans with a girly design.

DEAN
What the hell?

SAM
(laughing)
Nice choice

DEAN
Shut it monkey!

INT HOTEL LOBBY
The boys are on the way out. Exit Dean.
Sam starts talking to Mark who hypnotises him

MARK
Hope you had a good time

SAM
Yeah, great

He walks out and Mark waves

MARK
(under breath)
Dumbass

INT. IMPALA
Sam hops in, Dean has his hands on the wheel

SAM
Nice guy

DEAN
Yeah

He starts the engine and they drive off into the sunset
DEAN (O.S)
Is that strawberry shampoo in my hair?!

umm I dont know if I'm allowed to stalk you or comment on your first half (but its really your fault you put this in your signature)
but well I LOVE IT!!!! ^_^ I think I have an idea where this is heading but I can tell you I LOVE the concept! It's wicked!!!!!
I wanna read more

excellent job :clap (as usual)

yay, was already ducking under the fire of tomatoes :lol:
Typing out 2nd half :P

:thud

:drink wake up woman! where's the rest of it? hm? hm? hm?

er that was kind of it, under the car pic. bit short :)

Totally penetrated by the amazing comedy in the script. Undeniably your best yet! :D Keep those awe-inspiring and uproarious juices flowing- Were all waiting patiently for your work to come. :cry

jezo! You're bloody posh! :lol: penetrated, ooh . Thanks :D

Evil :bang

^WHAT'S EVIL? :)

you saying:

Tis :bang

*palm slap* oh.... i get it, well still continuing the other one :)

so? Is that a reason to up and finish this??
Is it? yes? Is it??

*sits on monkey boy and joins his pouting*

but i can't really continue it, can i? Not that good :rolleyes:

yes good turn him into a monkey or something :halo

Can i just say i love the idea, but i hate the way you made Dean, not Dean! I know that is what was meant to happen but still, you can do better. I still like where you are coming from. :D You need to make DEan more B) less :cheer
Love you xxx