Tova

Name:Tova(two-vee)
Species:mongoose
Age:9 moons
Gender:female
Rank:none(I think cause i don't know mongoose ranks)
Troop/Alliances:Sun troop
Picture:
Description: Tova has a sliver fur with black stripes running down her back. She has deep blue eyes. Since she lives in the desert she would be very hard not to notice at all. Her bright coloured fur makes her stick out like a sour thumb.
Personality: Tova has a upbeat attituide and quriky mind. She will always do the right thing be it good or bad. But she also is rebellious. She will often not do what she is asked to do just so she can hekp others. For instance she is often givien jobs in the sun troop but will not do them just to help a friend. For this she is often been looked at by higher members as a traiter.
History: Tova has lived in the sun troop all her life and has seen the goings on inside. Her mother and father were well known in the troop. After their death which Tova herself didn't even see, she was given harder task to do,maybe to make up for her parents absence. It was here that she began to not do her task she would often sneak out and wander the desert just for fun while the others worried and got mad at her. But did she care? No not at all. She rather liked to help others thats all.
Example RP: do I really have to do this.
Password: Knights of Ga'hoole fly

(sorry about the quilty of the form I still don't the the plot very well.

Oh, c'mon, Koldo. First of all, you can do WAAAAY better than that. Seriously. This isn't second grade, one to two sentence responses won't do. And if you don't really know the plot very well, you should ask, we would have explained it to you. Look at all the other bios; everyone else puts at least a paragraph or so into each field, usually more. Strix and I sometimes go to the length of five or six paragraphs per field. Describe everything better; the personality is bland, uninteresting. What are you charries' faults? How do they handle certain issues? Is there anything that personally offends them? The Description also evokes little to no mental imagery. I can envision all of Strix's and Forrest's charries perfectly, and I think you should want me to do the same for your charries. Also, as for age, 15 would make Tova a very old mongoose. XD. I have a four-year old mongoose, he'd be about twelve, maybe thirteen. Also, that History will NOT do. This bio, if it can even be classified as one, barely exceeds the 50-word minimum. You're what, 14, 15? I think we can expect better than this from you.

Sorry if I was a bit harsh, but really now, this isn't the best way for you to start out again. Strix might be nice enough to pass you with no questions asked, but I think that it's about time we ask for higher quality than this.

Also, for any mods/admins/Firey's reading, I suggest we raise the 50-word minimum. Perhaps to 100 or 200. I'd ask for more, but I doubt I'd get that much of a change.

I know. The reson its like that is because I am waiting for a pm about the plot and I made the bio to have it ready. I don't even know the nature of the mongooses.

Oh, c'mon. Even with the little you had to work with, you should've been able to do better than this. I mean, the description, at least, and the personality and history can all be improved; you need not even mention that much about the mongoose society within them. No need to make excuses; just improve on it.

How is it now. Need more in it cause I can add more.

Er...Koldo? You could start by using question marks for one. Unless both of the shift keys on your keyboard can't work, I can't think of any other legitimate excuse you have for not doing so. >.>

TP's right, Koldo. You can't expect to waltz in with the bare bones of a bio and expect to have it accepted ( Or at least, expect to make a good impression with such a bio after some time spent in inactivity... ). xP

Try looking around at the other bios and see how the RPers elaborate on their characters. Or else, you could look back on my old posts advising folks how to lengthen their bios with more content.

( I won't say anything along those lines because TP has already given you some examples. Also beause I've advised you on such things so many times that any more repeating would make me sound like a broken record. XD; )

You want people to know there's so much more to your character than just "smart, shy, quiet"....or "thin, small, has spots". Whatever.

You should totally look around sometimes, you know.

This might help as well...

By the way...you could also try specifying what species of mongoose Tova is?

( Note: I have no idea if mongeese having silver fur is possible... )

I totally agree. Um... -goes to play around with word-count thingy-

RP posts: I'd say factoring in the fact that we'd have plenty to fill in, given settings, appearance of the character, their thoughts and various blab, it could be raised to two/three hundred words.

On bios: Perhaps one hundred and fifty words for each of the appearance, personality and history sections?