some new shit. peep, let me know what you guys think
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some new shit. peep, let me know what you guys think| starks |
Posted: Dec 19 2005, 09:55 PM
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XL Cadet  Group: Members Posts: 8 Member No.: 296 Joined: 13-November 05  |
yo there aint’ no second chance at this life
make one wrong move get a knife to slice right through your wind pipe nowadays not only men fight women tear each others hair out arguing over who there men like you have the blacks browns and then white all hating each other instead of sharing there varied insights. now don’t get the idea i’m a consious rapper obnoxious backpacker who won’t hesitate to smack ya i don’t give a fuck about anything not conscernin me only my friends n famlily ever one else can burn eternaly live life by the day keep in mind the needs of tommorrow no matter which direction i take it seems the reaper follows i hustle to shake him loose but the noose keeps getting tighter burn the rope from my neck leaving a scar from the lighter with every bar i grow tired and sick of this mess until i snap and throw lady liberty the dick up her dress i’m pissed off flippin and yes i’m nervous and scared i got a baby at home and i’m far from prepared i need to build for her so she never needs or wants get her out of the city away from the creeps who haunt the streets are hot and they’re starting to scorch filled with freaks on every block setting up forts on their porch you got whole cities filled with pediphiles and rapists cats who never had a thing growing up so now they take shit their whole life’s a mistake and i’m here to erase it to scared to face it hiding behind beer getting waisted so i peer through the basement window not tryin to run i’m gonna fight until the world ends and die with a gun you see i’m just taking this time to lace up a rhyme that keeps me shaking inside waiting patient to slide in and and spit in there face when they die i hate you kids, i’ll bite your face and rip and incase in gold the teeth i ate you with |
 
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| Soul Taker |
Posted: Dec 21 2005, 09:12 AM
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XL Soldier Elite  Group: V.I.P. Posts: 366 Member No.: 78 Joined: 11-October 05 |
i'll start by high-lighting your strong points,this was a nice drop,your
flow was good,your contents and vocab were strong,and i think the rhymes biggest asset was the fact that you kept it simple,which in this case works well,your line lengths helped your flow no-ends and were pleasing top the eye,the only draw back to this piece is the lack of multi's {word},which would of turned this drop from good to fire... anyways all in all it was nice....8/10.......peace. |
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| Xiaolin Disciple |
Posted: Dec 21 2005, 12:46 PM
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XL Swat Leader Group: V.I.P. Posts: 544 Member No.: 125 Joined: 14-October 05 |
yo there aint’ no second chance at this life
make one wrong move get a knife to slice right through your wind pipe - began the rhyme strong i hustle to shake him loose but the noose keeps getting tighter burn the rope from my neck leaving a scar from the lighter - nice with every bar i grow tired and sick of this mess until i snap and throw lady liberty the dick up her dress - wow i’m pissed off flippin and yes i’m nervous and scared i got a baby at home and i’m far from prepared i need to build for her so she never needs or wants get her out of the city away from the creeps who haunt the streets are hot and they’re starting to scorch filled with freaks on every block setting up forts on their porch - i like these lines...speaking the truth you got whole cities filled with pediphiles and rapists cats who never had a thing growing up so now they take shit their whole life’s a mistake and i’m here to erase it to scared to face it hiding behind beer getting waisted - speaking the truth here again...nice so i peer through the basement window not tryin to run i’m gonna fight until the world ends and die with a gun you see i’m just taking this time to lace up a rhyme that keeps me shaking inside waiting patient to slide in and and spit in there face when they die - one after the other...great all in all i like this one consistant with the lines great job 9/10 |
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